Wednesday, February 15, 2017

Writing With the Senses - The Domestic Violence Shelter

I wrote this on August 1, 2008 as one of my sensory writing exercises for the Christian Writers Guild:

My thoughts on the benefits of sensory observations:


As Ethel Herr states in An Introduction to Christian Writing on page 31, “[Our senses] are the physical gateways that lead all the impulses from the outside world into our minds and hearts. We must keep them well oiled, active, and in good repair, lest our neglect cause us to miss something important.”  We take in the world using our senses.  Many of our most powerful memories involve sensory experiences – the pain and pleasure of childbirth, our favorite restaurants, and when and why they became our favorites, the first time we smelled our favorite cologne/perfume, or touched silk, or enjoyed the opera, or saw our first college acceptance letter.  Stories come alive for the reader when we engage their senses. 

The Exercise:


When I first went to the domestic violence shelter for my orientation a few weeks ago, I was surprised by the stained carpets, dilapidated staircases, and the strong smell of mildew.  When the trainer said that the shelter would be moving to a better location in September, I was relieved.  During my first week of volunteering, the light in the playroom was broken, so although the room was filled with many brightly colored toys – a hot pink boa for dressing up, red, green, yellow and blue cars, and who can forget the bright orange skin on the Sesame Street muppet, Ernie - we had to rely on the quickly disappearing light from the window.  When I went to use the bathroom, there was an “x” across the toilet made out of masking tape that said, “Do Not Use” in black permanent marker.  It seems to me that women and children on the run from abusers deserve a beautiful place to live – working toilets, bright sunny windows, fluffy couches, and fresh lilacs on coffee tables.

When I went in last week, it was my turn to play with the 8 month old baby boy while my partner played with the little girl who’s almost two.  I was a little nervous about playing with the baby for 90 minutes, because my knees hurt when I bend down, but as soon as his mom passed him to me, I inhaled a whiff of his baby powder, and the memory of my own children at that age made me not want to let him go.  Before his mom left, she said she had a cold, and was looking forward to the break.  As I stroked his back, I could both feel and hear his rattled breathing.  I guess he had a cold, too.  From this other sounds and smells coming from him, it seemed that he also had a little gas. 

I held his fat little hands as I tried to help him stand.  Is there anything on earth as soft as a baby’s skin?  I tried showing him a plastic book, but how quickly I forgot how much babies like to put everything in their mouths.  I wanted to continue showing him the books, but I was conflicted about touching all the drool he left on the books (all four of them).  I don’t think I would’ve cared if he wasn’t sick, but I guess I’m more of a germaphobe than I thought.  Looking down at my leg and seeing the sticky, creamy residue left behind when he spit up on me didn’t help.  Where were antibacterial wipes when you needed them?

The little girl who’s almost two loves to play with the kitchen toys, and while I was holding the baby, she regularly came over to offer the pizza she “cooked” to me and the baby.  The baby doesn’t know what pizza tastes like yet, but pretending to eat her food, especially when I didn’t really have enough time to eat before coming to the shelter, sure brought to mind the blend of tomato sauce, oregano, mozzarella cheese, and the crunchy, yet, chewy crust from pizza slices that I haven’t had in so long. 

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